i especially love the last line.... it makes it seem like people are going crazy very expressive..... my one suggestion is maybe in ur middle line make it less air words..... has, the, of, all u could possibley add to more expresive words instead of these words
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this s really good....
i especially love the last line.... it makes it seem like people are going crazy very expressive..... my one suggestion is maybe in ur middle line make it less air words..... has, the, of, all u could possibley add to more expresive words instead of these words
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